It doesn't seem to be structured like most songs, do you have a chorus and bridge or are you freehanding?
Well told tho, say so much through so little really. Which makes it good.
Is it finished by the way?, just seems like its more after the last line really.
I see, cool :). Well again, looks good :).
Looks good. It should work fine with music. Are you going to set the lyrics to music as well or are you just writing the lyrics?