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Prologue, The dark one, treads through the fiery cityscape with all its cracked pavement, splitting in his quake. Towers of steel and glass fall from the glowing heavens, leaving desolation wherever the dark one goes. Abrupt terror emanates from the pores of the hellacious city, oozing towards his soul to fill his hunger. Eyes of darkness smile as he finally arrives, watching him with his fanciful suit with its silver embroidered buttons. He grins at them with his withered skin and menacing blue eyes. They begin to encase him, melding into one being. His withered skin falls away, leaving flawless marble. Nomenclature, Richard Faite Thompson II
hippygod1 hippygod1 22-25, M 5 Answers Jan 21 in Community

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Interesting character and setting. Could use some help from an editor to get the sentences a little cleaner, but that's minor if you're just hashing out an idea :)

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Thoughtless Intros......

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Nice intro.

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I don't know. Not a huge fan of the tense choice. <br />
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I'm always weary of young authors because there tends to be some of those stylistic choices that I can never quite get excited about. Still, it's good to see people flexing their creative muscles.

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I love it. Keep writing more

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