Could be a good story, but find a good editor. He "uncovers" the truth, he doesn't "undercover" it. I know what you meant, but small lapses like that can derail a reader's train of thought and ruin their sense of being immersed in the story, and the one who writes it is often too close to it to notice even after repeated re-readings.<br />
I can hook you up with someone who can format it properly for e-readers, as well - also something you should never try to do yourself unless you have an extremely high tolerance for frustration and advanced editing skills in multiple applications, as well as HTML.
I know it was a typo, but the person who made the typo will often not be able to see it even in a re-read, it's a neurological quirk. that's why it's best to have a proof-reader who's not the author.
Depending on if you could write well, yes. Sounds like a promising premise
As a writer of many years, if this is your first attempt my advice would be to start writing now. Any medium is fine- but it takes lots of writing practice to develop style, rhythm, a good sense of character development, not to mention your personal flair. I think crime/detective stories are more difficult because foreshadowing, being vague without being TOO vague, and hinting to gain interest is harder than just describing what happened. Anything can be a good book if written well :) Good luck
I think it could be an interesting story. I hope you have a good editor. Judging from the number of mistakes in the single paragraph you wrote a whole book like that could be unreadable. I'm not one to normally comment on spelling and grammar mistakes, god knows I make enough myself, but if you're purporting to be a professional writer certainly you should be able to get through a single three sentence paragraph without errors.
Thank you for taking my criticism with grace. I do think it could be very interesting if written well. I have no talent for writing myself. I envy those who do. I am an avid reader, always in the middle of at least two books (currently reading Dean Koontz - Relentless and John Grisham - The Confession). I marvel at the writers ability to turn a phrase. i think I could come up with good story lines and plots but there is no way I could write it to make it interesting.