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I Dream Of Change

Chapter Two: The Cottage

By: Newguy3214
Written on November 19th, 2012
Age: 13-15 , Male
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13 responses
  • Cooldude23419

    No luck and it's 3:10 (yawn)
    Nice stoiy bye I'll try again

    Nov 26, 2012
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  • aardvark01

    If you wrote this and your age is right, J k Rowling had better watch out, I'm not an author etc but it read well to me. going to find Part one now.

    Nov 22, 2012
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  • 0cutting0and0frustration0

    AWESOME~~~~

    Nov 22, 2012
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  • AnonymousDarkWriter

    I think this was good. But if you really want to build a lot of suspense, take the story slow. I think you have a great imagination and great ideas, but learn to slow down with your plot.
    Everything goes too fast and it seems like if we're missing patches of information that can make this chapter greater. Above all that, it's good. I liked it. Keep up the great work.

    Sorry if I sound serious -.- Writing is kind of my thing.

    Nov 20, 2012
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    • aardvark01

      If it was taken to slowly no one would read it on here. I fear

      Nov 22, 2012
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    • AnonymousDarkWriter

      to build up the suspense, I would say.
      More details. But I do agree. For every other writer there's a limit. You could even bore yourself writing too much.

      Nov 23, 2012
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  • Rileynekocat

    oh very cool i cant wait to see whats next

    Nov 19, 2012
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    • javvi0007

      yeah me also wait for wht next :P

      Nov 20, 2012
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  • yviivy

    ah!!! im dying to know what happens next!! haha this is really good :3

    Nov 19, 2012
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  • Blizzards

    meeeeeeeeeeeep!!!!!1!!!!!! when next story!

    Nov 19, 2012
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  • 1234icu

    Oh! Yaay! Love it, you know how much I love your story's! & lol I rated your story like a tons (: , hope everything is awesome with da faamily :) , love ya buddy peace!

    Nov 19, 2012
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  • HakujitsuSeiten

    it's so short D: now you have to pray that i can fall asleep tonight without thinking of what is actually gonna happen after it :O

    Nov 19, 2012
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    • javvi0007

      hello how are you

      Nov 20, 2012
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