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Chapter Two: The Cottage

The old man stared at me with his dark green eyes, then he pressed his hand to his head... "Hmm", he said softly... "What a very interesting name."... "Well come along Moon, ill show were you'll be sleeping tonight."....

The old man lead me upstairs into the old dusty cottage... at the top the stairs there was a very narrow small hallway... giving three rooms... two rooms on the left, and one on the right... then old man lead me to the second door telling me this was a extra bedroom he had...

Inside there was a bed in the middle of the room on the right hand corner facing sideways... with a rug under it... then a desk holding a lantern on the left side of the room...

I thanked the man for the room... then I shut the old bark dusty door and slowly... I laid on the bed wondering if I should leave or stay... and defiantly thinking about my mom and my dad...

Thinking if my mothers black raven hair that blended with night... then my dads dark blue eyes as if they looked like the moon was reflecting in a small pond...

Those are things I remember the most because those were things they gave to me... my black raven hair... blending with dads dark blue eyes... and my white pale skin... and that's why my parents named me "Moon."

Finally I went to sleep... I started dreaming of my family... before the night my parents were taken... I remember getting up in the morning where we were living in a small motel...

It was as same as this cottage... but I remember packing my things... finally telling myslef that we were going to have our own house, and that I would finally go to school...

I look so forward... but everything went downhill ever sense that night... that cold winter night.... I remember that I could hardly see anything with the white snow blowing right into my face...

Finally I woke up... I hurried down stairs where the old man was just sitting in one of his chairs... staring at a painting of a young women with brown hair and toad green eyes like him... he seemed so sad... I didn't say anything...

I hurried outside to see if the blizzard went down... finally when I went outside...

It was even worse...

The End...

Chapter Three: Town Hall... coming soon...

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Newguy3214 Newguy3214 13-15, M 10 Responses Nov 19, 2012

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Amazing story

Thanks, I really want to start a new seires. I'm just brainstorming though.

Your writing is just amazing makes me wanna read more

Lol thanks

No luck and it's 3:10 (yawn)
Nice stoiy bye I'll try again

If you wrote this and your age is right, J k Rowling had better watch out, I'm not an author etc but it read well to me. going to find Part one now.

AWESOME~~~~

I think this was good. But if you really want to build a lot of suspense, take the story slow. I think you have a great imagination and great ideas, but learn to slow down with your plot.
Everything goes too fast and it seems like if we're missing patches of information that can make this chapter greater. Above all that, it's good. I liked it. Keep up the great work.

Sorry if I sound serious -.- Writing is kind of my thing.

If it was taken to slowly no one would read it on here. I fear

to build up the suspense, I would say.
More details. But I do agree. For every other writer there's a limit. You could even bore yourself writing too much.

oh very cool i cant wait to see whats next

yeah me also wait for wht next :P

ah!!! im dying to know what happens next!! haha this is really good :3

meeeeeeeeeeeep!!!!!1!!!!!! when next story!

Oh! Yaay! Love it, you know how much I love your story's! & lol I rated your story like a tons (: , hope everything is awesome with da faamily :) , love ya buddy peace!

it's so short D: now you have to pray that i can fall asleep tonight without thinking of what is actually gonna happen after it :O

hello how are you