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Railroad Station

(attempting to write songs)





~ RAILROAD STATION ~

Ever since I met you I've been waiting to know you
Just a glimpse wasn't nearly enough.
Are you only a dream, a phantom to me?
Or are you really the man that you seem?

CHORES: Meet me at the railroad station
Where we let go of a feeling so right
I just couldn't resist, it was only a kiss,
But I remember that look in your eyes...


Where did you go?
Where are you going?
Is there room for me in you?

I've been waiting for the 'time's right'. 
Wondering if it's worth the fight.
But I can't let go of of the truth...


CHORES:  Pick me up at the railroad station
Where we let go of a feeling so right
I just couldn't resist, it was only a kiss,
But I remember that look in your eyes...


I've been waiting for things to get smooth.
Thinking like a foolish youth.
I've been wading through my own storms,
Tearing off this Crown of Thorns
Trying to find myself in the Truth!

CHORES: Meet me at the railroad station
Where we let go of a feeling so right
I just couldn't resist, it was only a kiss,
But I remember that look in your eyes...


DrewBerry DrewBerry 46-50, F 5 Responses Jul 8, 2012

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Nice! I can hear this as a country song.

Music is the most awesome of all things to enjoy in life. It truly is the international language and has no boundaries of age, race or distance.



~ peace little grasshopper ~

I wouldn't say they were inconsistent. And to be honest, if it was a slow song (and the only song I can think of is something like Nirvana's 'Something In The Way' of the top of my head) it really wouldn't matter all that much I wouldn't think.

Sadly I only hear the words. Never the Chord progression or melody. I'm going to take it to some songwriter friends here in Nashville to see if someone of real musical talent can help stitch it together.. there's a BRIDGE in there somewhere.

thanks again. please revisit the re-write :)

That's always the hard thing about lyrics being read from the outside, we have no idea what speed it's in to read them. I find myself reading lyrics like I read poetry, which doesn't work out at all haha!
Keep working at this though, it is really good I think!

Thanks, I appreciate the encouragement. EP is where I come for that... you didn't let me down.

xxx

Thanks Reece. It's a first run for me and I'm already re-working some of the verses. I completely agree they are too short and lack consistency.



Much appreciated.

Very nice! Lovely lyrics DrewBerry!

Without knowing the exact time this is meant to be sung in, the only thing I can add though is that the verses seem a little on the short side. Not a negative as such (as most of the time the 'time' fixes this), just an observation.

I'm thinking 4/4 time (gosh I forgot all that theory).. ugga

Ah ok then, seems right. I am trying to remember all my music times and such from primary school (which was I think 12 years ago). Way to make me think haha!