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Tittery Tock

Tittery tittery tock
Paint this little block
Kiss the bride
Leave a mess
Tittery tittery tock
Nail the shutters,
Board the doors
Tittery tittery tock
Stash some food
Drink some more
Tittery tittery tock
Ruffles pink, hair a mess
Tittery tittery tock
Love like this
Forevermore
Tittery tittery tock
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Run and hide
Break down the doors!
Tittery tittery tock
Throbbing heart
Jittered hands
Tittery tittery tock
Reek of filth
Snore low down
Tittery tittery tock
Pry the lock, up above
Tittery tittery tock!
Bastard , where’s the dog at now?
Tittery tittery tock!
Tittery tittery tock!
TIC
TOC
TIC
TOC
….creaping boards
Resounding click
Tittery tittery tock
Glare of light
Squelch of air
Gasp!
Brown claws beneath
Waiting to scratch
To creek, to creek!
Ga Go
Ga Go
Go
Go
Go
Go
Swish.
Run
Sprint
Go
Go
Go
Open arms across the street
Run
Run
Run
Run
Ushered love
Inside the door
Just breathe. Just breathe
It’s over now
We’re out and gone
To white robes we now flee.

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I'm thinking of continuing to write a short story this way. I'll switch back and forth from each perspective to give more insight into what's really happening. What do you think? Would you read it? I've never written in this style before.
samancat samancat 18-21, F 2 Responses Aug 2, 2011

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I really like how you paint a picture with few words.. but I am sure it would make a great short story too.. You have talent lady :-)

Yes I would read it. You put just enough into it to make it a worthwhile thing. But I would suggest a tiny bit more real touching and tattering.