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Thirst

Imagine a thirsty moment
Your parched throat needs relief
Now consider me your water
And splash me against your teeth
Feel my soothing coolness
Dance upon your tongue
As I dribble down your throat
From your palette which I have clung
Now take another drink of me
And swirl me in your mouth
Cleanse your ginger breath
As you swish me all about
Take all of me and swallow
As your desires I submerse
And remember me my darling
Each time you might feel thirst
thatguy1970 thatguy1970 41-45, M 15 Responses May 29, 2012

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Good poem. I think you mean "palate" though, rather than palette. Sorry, I know, it's a stupid spelling thing. Great writing.

Ah, you're write. (see what I did there?) Thanks. :)

Stunning*

Satisfaction in a thirsty moment. I love that. Nice post : )

Thank you :)

Whew! what a poem. I need a drink...Lol

lol. Funny lady.

am really in thirst for "something" and I wanna quench it..then your poem made me more thirsty...*winks!

Wow!

Nice job! I like your rhyme scheme choice. Personally some of the lines formed some really inappropriate and most likely unintentional metaphors. My mind is floating in the gutter. Sorry lol

Thanks. Unintentional or intentional? It is left up to the reader to think about it.

Water is valuable gift of God is what i believe :)

Small portions of splashes it does bring relief !

Yes it does. :)

in right places :)

Ok, I wrote a different response and then deleted it because it didn't quite explain my response to this poem. Hopefully this will---- WOW!! This is soooooooo hot! I LOVE it. You are very talented. ;-)

Thank you :)

You are more than welcome. ;-)

Awesome!!....love what you wrote..:)

Thank you. :)

Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

Thank you. :)

You've captured the sensuality, raw sexual tension and wanton abandon of oral sex and made it dance across the page almost gleefully. You have a gift with words and a strong appetite for sexuality. It's a beautiful combination! I really enjoy reading your powerful poetry. :)

Thank you. When I began writing it, it was just about being thirsty for another person. It morphed. :)

Isnt that how it always starts? A girl says shes thirsty and next thing she knows your breaking out the fire hose. Oh...Im not as good with words as you. Very talented.

very descriptive.. love this

Thank you.

That's a great poem. I couldn't have done any better, WOW!

Thank you, Meha.

once again you write with skill and grace. You are one smart cookie.

I respect you as a writer and thank you for your praise. :)

Wow,,,Your good at this. I LOVED it!!

Thanks. It comes and goes. :)