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Thirst

By: thatguy1970
Written on May 29th, 2012
Imagine a thirsty moment
Your parched throat needs relief
Now consider me your water
And splash me against your teeth
Feel my soothing coolness
Dance upon your tongue
As I dribble down your throat
From your palette which I have clung
Now take another drink of me
And swirl me in your mouth
Cleanse your ginger breath
As you swish me all about
Take all of me and swallow
As your desires I submerse
And remember me my darling
Each time you might feel thirst
By: thatguy1970
Age: 41-45 , Male
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34 responses
  • Eaowyn
    Eaowyn

    Good poem. I think you mean "palate" though, rather than palette. Sorry, I know, it's a stupid spelling thing. Great writing.

    Mar 7
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Ah, you're write. (see what I did there?) Thanks. :)

      Mar 8
      1 like
  • gumbone
    gumbone

    Stunning*

    Mar 2
    2 likes
  • littlecreekgirl
    littlecreekgirl

    Satisfaction in a thirsty moment. I love that. Nice post : )

    Jan 29
    3 likes
  • 0n1WOW
    0n1WOW

    Whew! what a poem. I need a drink...Lol

    Nov 24, 2012
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      lol. Funny lady.

      Nov 27, 2012
      1 like
    • 0n1WOW
      0n1WOW

      am really in thirst for "something" and I wanna quench it..then your poem made me more thirsty...*winks!

      Nov 30, 2012
      1 like
  • PleaseBeFree
    PleaseBeFree

    Wow!

    Oct 14, 2012
    2 likes
  • UpsideIn
    UpsideIn

    Nice job! I like your rhyme scheme choice. Personally some of the lines formed some really inappropriate and most likely unintentional metaphors. My mind is floating in the gutter. Sorry lol

    Sep 23, 2012
    1 like
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Thanks. Unintentional or intentional? It is left up to the reader to think about it.

      Sep 23, 2012
      1 like
  • hotcrossbun
    hotcrossbun

    Water is valuable gift of God is what i believe :)

    Small portions of splashes it does bring relief !

    Aug 7, 2012
    1 like
  • LindyJill
    LindyJill

    Ok, I wrote a different response and then deleted it because it didn't quite explain my response to this poem. Hopefully this will---- WOW!! This is soooooooo hot! I LOVE it. You are very talented. ;-)

    Aug 7, 2012
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Thank you :)

      Aug 7, 2012
      1 like
    • LindyJill
      LindyJill

      You are more than welcome. ;-)

      Aug 7, 2012
      1 like
  • lexuslourve
    lexuslourve

    Awesome!!....love what you wrote..:)

    Jun 17, 2012
    2 likes
  • dare2love
    dare2love

    Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

    Jun 10, 2012
    2 likes
  • smilinbabe212003
    smilinbabe212003

    You've captured the sensuality, raw sexual tension and wanton abandon of oral sex and made it dance across the page almost gleefully. You have a gift with words and a strong appetite for sexuality. It's a beautiful combination! I really enjoy reading your powerful poetry. :)

    Jun 4, 2012
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Thank you. When I began writing it, it was just about being thirsty for another person. It morphed. :)

      Jun 4, 2012
      1 like
    • gumbone
      gumbone

      Isnt that how it always starts? A girl says shes thirsty and next thing she knows your breaking out the fire hose. Oh...Im not as good with words as you. Very talented.

      Mar 2
      1 like
  • pursuitoftheblackwidow
    pursuitoftheblackwidow

    very descriptive.. love this

    Jun 2, 2012
    2 likes
  • Mehameha
    Mehameha

    That's a great poem. I couldn't have done any better, WOW!

    May 31, 2012
    2 likes
  • myheartswords
    myheartswords

    once again you write with skill and grace. You are one smart cookie.

    May 29, 2012
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      I respect you as a writer and thank you for your praise. :)

      May 29, 2012
      1 like
  • Thatguy1970sDreamgirl
    Thatguy1970sDreamgirl

    I love this sweetheart! You are so amazing and talented...you captured the passion , the desire and the craving so beautifully. I am blessed to have your love :)

    May 29, 2012
    2 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Thank you, love. You do. :)

      May 29, 2012
      1 like
  • sierra33
    sierra33

    Wow,,,Your good at this. I LOVED it!!

    May 29, 2012
    3 likes
    • thatguy1970
      thatguy1970

      Thanks. It comes and goes. :)

      May 29, 2012
      1 like