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I Want to Write Poetry

A Fictional Charectors' View

By: puck61
Written on April 21st, 2007
By: puck61
Age: 51-55 , Male
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10 responses
  • mother1983

    it's very beautiful poem.

    Apr 6, 2008
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  • cinfullynn

    Bravo Jack, it was very good I thought!!! And puck write away, it helps!

    Feb 24, 2008
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  • Radiant

    Since I have never seen my muse, I guess I am not amused! A need amuse. :)



    did I say that.......



    R

    Nov 15, 2007
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  • Radiant

    Good beginning, the last 7-8 lines could be re arranged so there is a slight beat like you have in the other lines and it would not hurt to have two places that rhyme.



    The thought is very good.



    R

    Oct 19, 2007
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  • JackGrey

    The Secret Spider



    What discomfort do I often feel

    but cannot name

    that sometimes makes me sick

    and hate myself?



    Something wriggles in my core

    In my soul



    Some loathsome, cold and damp

    intruder

    scratches with its damning finger

    my name upon the wall

    inside me



    This creature of unknown girth

    shrinks and swells

    ‘til I am bloated and my skin feels tight



    And I, in my need to analyze

    my every thought,

    simply cannot grasp

    how it got in me in the first place



    I only know it’s there

    Oct 19, 2007
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  • puck61

    Lay some tracks, Jack!

    Oct 19, 2007
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  • JackGrey

    So what? You want to read some poetry? I have stacks of it.

    Oct 19, 2007
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  • quietrocket

    kudos

    Oct 17, 2007
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  • Freestanding

    Well said!

    Sep 27, 2007
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  • MiddleChild

    I never thought about poetry being that voilent and negative. You are a writer. Writers are people who like to play with words. Poetry is just a different game.

    Sep 9, 2007
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