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I Want You To Write A Poem Off-the-cuff Right Here Right Now

Sunlight In Your Hair

By: lyricalongings
Written on June 26th, 2010
Age: 31-35 , Female
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    lyricalongings

    I don't think it would work as a song lol. Though there are a lot of songs that are more than 3 minutes-- most are, in fact.

    Jul 4, 2010
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    ILoveMarie

    anyway, this is the 2010's, it's the job of the lover to approach the loved no matter what gender either is :-D

    Jun 27, 2010
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    ILoveMarie

    You could turn this into a song, but I'm not sure would fit into 3 minutes...

    Jun 27, 2010
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    womaninbliss

    I really liked it lyricalongings. I like the repetitive rhythm ... it's like an inner conversation where you keep reinforcing your thoughts ... building on them and finally putting them all together at the end. Very nice ... I agree with koyptakh ...

    Jun 27, 2010
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    koyptakh

    Hi lyricalongings

    well I thought it was good. I read it all the way through and wanted to know what happened. I think you capture the sense of passivity very well. It is like a stream of consciousness. It goes in circles which is just fine. No flaws.

    :)

    Jun 27, 2010
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