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No More Tears

If I could have
only one wish
I would
with all that I am
wish for you
to never shed
a tear
unless
it were accompanied
by your beautiful
smile.

If I could change
all the wrong
that has been
put upon your
delicate shoulders
I would spend
all of my life
making certain
the only things
you had to carry
was a lifetime
of happiness
and a heartful
of love.
AllFoundandNoLost AllFoundandNoLost 41-45, M 10 Responses Nov 5, 2010

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only if we could, we would, change the world.............very beautiful poem...

Thank you. We are tying the knot on Valentine's this coming. I didn't know I could be this happy.

This is just so heartfelt, sentimental and beautiful. The woman you love is very lucky indeed.

I like the imagery created by the natural flow of the write. I would think, however, to change the final verb "was" to agree with the nouns... <br />
<br />
ie: "making certain<br />
the only things<br />
you had to carry<br />
was a lifetime<br />
of happiness<br />
and a heartful <br />
of love."<br />
<br />
... change "was" to "were." <br />
<br />
Other than that I find it quite lovely a poem:) Enjoyed:)

i thought we covered that? ;-)

If this is a cowardly goodbye poem, it is rather arrogant and insincere. Otherwise, delightful and heartwarming. ..

well, it ain't no goodbye, i am just now getting her! :-)

If this is a cowardly goodbye poem, it is rather arrogant and insincere. Otherwise, delightful and heartwarming. ..

thanks sunshine...i hope she thinks so

Thank you so much for sharing in it with me, mystikRage. Everything is made so much more beautiful by sharing it.