Hi there, I need help to chek this traslation.
These are the lyric of a song I wrote, the original is italian.
I've tried to do a translation in English, but I would like to make it check to someone... can you help me?

This is the song: 

You find the translation in the youtube page... just under the video:


MuddyAlex MuddyAlex
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Dec 10, 2012