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I Write Poetry

An Ode To The One I Never Knew

By: grayday104
Written on February 17th, 2013
Age: 22-25 , Male
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    Incongruence

    Hahahaa what day is this?!! My emotions are mixed up by your three stories lol.. And now this one is a pain of one sided love. My comments would go monotonous if I keep saying all of your poems are awesome :O
    Is there a woman who acts as an inspiration behind all your poetry or your appreciation for what is happening around you playing up the scene?

    May 13
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    tamilola

    Righteousness!

    May 11
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    Tis99

    Wow dude...you have some real talent

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      grayday104

      Well I've had alot of practice been at it since 11 http://www.experienceproject.com/stories/Write-Poetry/3057937

      May 7
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      Tis99

      Very cool...I have a lot of respect for people who can express themselves like you do

      May 7
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      grayday104

      Thanks it just took alot of time and pain but I'm glad my writing can make others happy : )

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    ladylouisiana

    You write well...and convey your deepest feelings..very good.

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      grayday104

      Too bad much of what I feel is pain : (

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      ladylouisiana

      I agree...I wish that were not the case :(

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      grayday104

      Me too!

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    ACRBNMSM

    Awww..so sad :( :( :(
    Sorry for that.
    I love the way you play with the words,it's pretty cool.

    May 6
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    RedQueenz

    So... awww.

    Apr 20
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      grayday104

      Yeah alot of my life is like that : (

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    Shadowroza

    Omg... this is great! So wsnting snd saddening. A perfect mix :)

    Apr 15
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      grayday104

      Thanks! Glad you liked this one has been around awhile but did alot of editing to it yesterday and I thought I'd see you on the actually full new one

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      Shadowroza

      Ahh okies ^^ ur welkies :)

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    crushme

    very well written, but sad at the same time..

    Apr 13
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    Abarai

    I don't usually get to rate up the stories I like becuase usually I'm on this site on a phone. Even now I have to go through a proxy is why I have to make a new comment instead of replying to your comment grayday104. But I rate the good stories up when I can.

    Apr 11
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      grayday104

      Thanks I appreciate the effort : )

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    Abarai

    Simply wondrous. Flows smoothly. Has a good story. Has a great message. I like it.

    Apr 10
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    nightmare1726

    That was exquisite! I loved the "Disdained by a dream which once granted relief" line! You are very talented.

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    themonsterkissy

    This is awesome, you are truly gifted.

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      grayday104

      Thanks you'll probably like this one aswell

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    anusaharia

    it was great....loved it :)

    Mar 28
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      grayday104

      See! told ya so!

      Mar 28
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    SkidlelyBoeBoe

    Another good one

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      grayday104

      okay well be sure to tell me if you find a bad one

      Mar 25
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      SkidlelyBoeBoe

      ok

      Mar 25
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    Pyrellia

    Nice poem. I like it. ^_~

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      grayday104

      Thanks where have you been?

      Mar 24
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      Pyrellia

      I guess just dealing with things. Taking each day as it comes.

      Mar 24
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      grayday104

      Oh I was just saying it sounded like you didn't want to hear from me any more kept hoping you'd change your mind

      Mar 24
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      Pyrellia

      Wow. No. I...I'm just dealing with some things. A lot of things.

      Mar 24
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    mystiere13

    you speak of loss, love, lust and want. love is tricky, loss is painful, lust drives us insane. but once the one we truly want finds us, well we have trouble not falling and once they are gone, well i can say that it is truly difficult to love again.

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      grayday104

      I've never lost cause I've never really loved

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      mystiere13

      but yet you critisise my writing? when you lose something close to you, or are seperated from the one thing close to you, then you willl understand.

      Mar 24
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      grayday104

      No I don't believe we'll ever agree on that I've been writing since I was 11 and being a writer requires you to be able to accept feedback otherwise it's all just arrogance

      Mar 24
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      mystiere13

      no...im not complaining...you just dont understand my writing. and i now realize that you just donot understand the meaning. if you did your answer would be different. its just that you are a writer and you should be able to realize its not just listing, and that most things writen often mean something.

      Mar 24
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      mystiere13

      but if you do not understand it then that is you.

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    itwontleaveme

    wow......just.....wow totally speechless great poem

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    CharleeLuv

    I rated this up like millions of times!!... I nearly cried from reading this! *sniffle*=]

    Mar 6
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      grayday104

      Thanks glad it touched you Why did the chicken cross the road?

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      Kind of random. I don't know...because the fox told him that there were corn nibbles on the other side, except, when he crossed the road, a car came and ran it over, then the fox took the chicken and ate it?? Satisfied at how well he fooled the chicken??

      Right? Lolz. Am I right?? =]

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      No his hen told him to and I just didn't want to leave you blue

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      CharleeLuv

      Oh...I don't get it. Mine was better...=]

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      Chickens are both male and female Hen is specifically a female chicken a chicken or rooster was told to cross the road cause his hen told him to

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      Ohz.. I get it now... Mine was still better. Js

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      I wish I knew what Js stands for

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      Just saying... I wish I could judge, but I can't. I just barely found out what Lms meant.

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      I don't know that one means either I'm so behind the times

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      It means like my status on Facebook.. Lolz. My cousin occasionally helps me with the hip slang these days. Which is sad because I'm only 18...scary = lolz.

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      grayday104

      Fb is the devil! Devil devil devil

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      You're telling me! So much friggin drama... I only have like ten friends tops.. Okay, not really, but its only my family and close friends, and I rarely get on it

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      yeah it's all just hype devil devil devil

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      Hahaha!! You're stupid! =]

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      grayday104

      Oh but I thought you liked me? I'm sad now : (

      Mar 6
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      CharleeLuv

      Wow.. You can't be that old. It's a joke

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      grayday104

      yeah I'm just joking back lol

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      CharleeLuv

      Oh okay! =]

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      grayday104

      I so got you got you good

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      CharleeLuv

      I mean, it was cool.. It wasn't all of that

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      grayday104

      But still cool

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      CharleeLuv

      Suuuure

      Mar 6
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      grayday104

      I'm cool! Best day ever!

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      CharleeLuv

      Hahaha!! Lolz.

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      grayday104

      I'm funny too!

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    ShineLikeJewelz

    I found your writing to actually feel masculine. I wonder if mine feels feminine. Very captivating!

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    Menty24

    Hmm.. Good poem but the Pixie Dust & Fairy Dust.. ugh, seems like you should choose one or the other. But all in all, I love how it started and ended. I think it was good.

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      grayday104

      Thanks for pointing that out it's an oops

      Feb 26
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    FragmentisPoetae

    i did like this - and i like the flow - there is only 2 places where the natural flow was stopped for me. but then again it adds to the poem and what is happening

    Feb 19
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    dakk1

    i think your really good at writing poetry however it feels like your forcing the rhymes :/ or maybe im wrong

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    Auror

    .......... hmmmmm ........................

    Feb 18
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    2011A

    Very nice! Kissessssssssssssssssss..xox Things will get better, love.

    Feb 18
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      grayday104

      Thanks I was worried it might be too much and well I just have too much to worry about already thanks

      Feb 18
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