Darklight-survivor Of Child Abuse

 Dark light

 

The blackness, so consuming, so suffocating,

The pendulum doth swing, which way, which way,

The spiralling stairway, twisting and writhing,

The mountain so high, a giant let’s say.

 

The pulling, the tugging with malevolent ardour,

Dragging you to darkness, the depths of despair,

How easy it seems, too relent and surrender,

A choice to be made, its’ now or never.

 

Look above, oh what a struggle, how high it seems,

Is that a light beyond the mountains peak?

How difficult it seems, how impossible a task,

A choice has to be made, its’ now or never.

 

Decisions, decisions, oh now it is made,

Light is the way as dark is too dark,

Reach up, climb up, let the darkness fade,

How bright, how lovely, a choice has been made.

Janette

jancro34 jancro34
36-40, F
5 Responses Mar 11, 2010

Thank you...

like bl<x>inking in the storm...you're gifted - look forward to more

Thank you very much for taking the time to read my poem.. I appreciate your comments and I find it interesting that you feel there is something missing. (I will give this some thought) I was very focused at the time on getting my message in there about (as you rightly say) the difficult journey of moving into the light from all the darkness.<br />
If you feel like adding more please feel free and again thank you.

Interesting.<br />
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I re-read it a few times to grasp it's meaning. Out of the darkness and into the light, very symbolic with the use of a spiraling staircase (which are usually the most difficult to ascend (besides a rope ladder).<br />
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I like your choice of adjectives and overall message, but there seems to be something missing in it, I am not sure, some kind of metaphor or something that will link all the stanzas together in a culminating triumph at the end, I guess... celebrating the victory of overcoming, or something like that.<br />
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But that is just my opinion.

Nice.