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The Legend Of Lushiro (Part Thirty)

By: Lushiro
Written on July 29th, 2012
By: Lushiro
Age: 18-21 , Male
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  • bunnyhound

    well done! i like where the story is going. and the detail is pretty visual. i do have one thing to point out, it seems that in the story so far, the story between fights is abbreviated and the fights themselves are more drawn out. the analogy that comes to mind is to say if it were a video game, i would call it "all dungeon and no overworld" although...the dungeons are excellent.

    Jul 29, 2012
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    • Lushiro

      Haha good observation. I have heard this comparison before =P I am still trying to find the perfect balance between "story mode" and fight scenes, trying to draw more into the story and shorter verses for fighting, yet keep the visuality there. Thank you again Bunnyhound you are amazing :)

      Jul 29, 2012
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